My Yunyang girlfriend is too sweet

"Game script?"

Ran Xian was a little surprised.

Haven't heard of what script Xu Yang is going to write?

"I want to make a simple love game"

Xu Yang scratched his hair in embarrassment.

Although Ran Xian was only two years older than him, Ran Xian did look much more mature. Xu Yang didn't look timid in front of her, and he was a little embarrassed when he asked for help.

"Love game?"

Ran Xian is still a little confused.

"Yes." Xu Yang nodded.

"I used to like all kinds of games and novels, and I basically read Sister Xian's novels at that time."

Xu Yang took the juice cup and turned it around.

"I had an idea before, I wanted to make my own game that was recognized by others, but it was put on hold a few years ago and I didn't take any action."

"Now I really want to realize my previous wish, and I have found inspiration, so I want to write a script by myself, and now my script is almost finished."

"Sister Xian, your writing is very good, so I would like to ask you to help me revise the script."

Xu Yang overcame his own psychological barriers and simply told the whole story.

After listening to Xu Yang's words, Ran Xian took a sip of tea.

"That's not a problem. Although I haven't written a script, I have some script friends who have a general understanding of the script and should be able to give you some advice."

When Xu Yang heard what Ran Xian said, he instantly smiled.

"Then Miss Xian, are you willing?"

"So, what about the script?"

Ran Xian looked at Xu Yang with a smile.

"Wait a minute, I'll go back and get it right away!"

Xu Yang jumped up directly and rushed out quickly.

"Hey"

Before Ran Xian could speak, Xu Yang had already gone out.

She smiled helplessly, Ran Xian originally wanted to say that she would just go to his house with Xu Yang, but before she could say anything, Xu Yang rushed out.

It seems that this script is very important to my brother.

Xu Yang went home and took the notebook, and quickly returned to Ran Xian.

"Here, Miss Xian!"

Ran Xian took the notebook and raised her eyebrows.

Is it still handwritten?

"Why didn't you type it on the computer? If you really want to use it, you must use the electronic file. Don't you think it's troublesome?"

"what?"

Xu Yang was taken aback.

"I did not expect."

When he was about to start writing, he didn't think of any electronic files at all. Just like his previous habit, he took out his notebook and started writing, without thinking about it at all.

"It's okay, anyway, it needs to be revised, and it will be fine to make it up when the time comes."

That's what Ran Xian said, after all, it's rare to see people who still write manuscripts by hand.

Ran Xian opened Xu Yang's notebook.

Needless to say, the writing is not bad.

Ran Xian evaluated in her heart, and looked back.

Xu Yang's script had quite a lot of words, and for a long time, only the sound of Ran Xian flipping through the notebook was heard, and Xu Yang sat beside him feeling like he didn't dare to vent his anger.

The more Ran Xian looked at it, the more surprised she became.

This is a very beautiful story, but the beauty is mixed with sourness. Ran Xian feels that she is very experienced in writing love light novels, and ordinary love stories can no longer easily impress her.

But Xu Yang's script didn't even have too many emotional and external descriptions, so Ran Xian was very involved.

This is a very powerful thing.

"Wow"

Xu Yang waited anxiously by the side for a long time, and then he heard Ran Xian, who had finally finished watching, sighed.

"Sister Xian. What do you think?"

Ran Xian didn't respond, and looked up at Xu Yang carefully.

Seeing Xu Yang felt even more disturbed.

Ran Xian What does this mean?Did she write so badly that she didn't even know how to say it?
Not at all, Xu Yang feels that his writing is pretty good.
"It's a good thing you didn't come to write love novels."

Ran Xian lowered her head and flipped through the notebook again.

"what?"

Xu Yang didn't understand what Ran Xian meant.

"If you come to write love light novels, my status will be lost."

Ran Xian smiled and raised her head to look at Xu Yang again, with admiration in her eyes.

Xu Yang was stunned.

"Fool, don't you understand? Say you write very well."

Ran Xian was amused by Xu Yang's dull appearance.

"Huh? Really?"

Xu Yang was a little shocked.

"Although there are many places that need to be revised, for example, you have many ending lines, but the logically oriented branch lines in the main line of the script have not been written."

Ran Xian flipped through her notebook and took out a pen from under the coffee table.

Where did this come from?
Seeing Ran Xian's juggling movements, Xu Yang wanted to take a look under the coffee table.

"I know that you may plan to add the branch line later, but you may not remember where to add it later. If the logic is not smooth, it will affect the smoothness of the plot, so you can spend more time next time. The main line and the branch line are carried out simultaneously, so that The follow-up can guarantee fluency, and the characters are not easy to collapse."

"There are not many characters in your script, so it may be easier to add branch lines later. If you need to write a script with a lot of characters later, this parallel method of main line and branch line is very useful."

Ran Xian sketched in a notebook and wrote suggestions to Xu Yang.

"The other thing is that there may still be some problems with the language and expression of the female characters. Maybe because you are a boy, the writing is not so appropriate. You can adjust it slowly later."

"There are also a lot of verbal expressions, because scripts are not like novels that can express a lot of information with narration, so the narration should not be too long, otherwise it will greatly affect the player's game experience."

"After all, too much text description space is very annoying. It is best to do this well in the script. The environment description can be reflected from the picture. These must be marked first, and the atmosphere must be extracted from the picture or the soundtrack first. Mark it out."

"You are more inclined to write novels now, and there are still many things to pay attention to in the script."

Ran Xian flipped through the notebook responsibly and explained to Xu Yang where the shortcomings were, which made Xu Yang nod repeatedly.

Time passed quickly, Ran Xian gave Xu Yang a lot of suggestions almost according to the progress of the script, and in the end, Ran Xian still praised Xu Yang once.

"This is your first time writing a script, so you may not notice many small problems, but you don't have to be afraid, your overall story is very good, with excellent story lines and skeletons."

"Even if it's a revision, you can just take it and submit it, and fill in the detailed content at that time, it will definitely explode."

Ran Xian smiled and returned the densely marked notebook to Xu Yang.

"Sister Xian, don't make fun of me."

Xu Yang rubbed his nose embarrassingly, a little surprised that Ran Xian had such a high opinion of him.

He thought that a boss like Ran Xian who was already very powerful would look down on the works of a rookie like himself.