How to Develop a Sick Brother Control

Then let's have a look!

What is An Yi Lun's true strength, if he can't even compare to such a guy's stuff, then my game review blog for so many years is in vain! "

What I didn't expect was that, after hearing his words, Lun also immediately ignited his fighting spirit, waved his fists a little excitedly, and shouted.

"Then, let's talk about the other guy!"

Looking at Lun Ye, who had already ignited his fighting spirit because of this simple act of his own, and the black cat who also turned his head to the side with a dull look on his face:

"how is everything?

What do you think of his assessment? "

And the black cat stared blankly at He Ye for a long time, then suddenly

"Wow"

I cried out loud.

"Emma, ​​although I'm really going to use Lun Ye's evaluation to stimulate her, but I won't cry!"

Looking at the appearance of the black cat, Kazuya was also obviously stunned, not knowing what to do at all.

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He also was obviously a little surprised by the appearance of the black cat. Although the primary purpose of calling the black cat over was to stimulate Lun Ye, so that Lun Ye had the motivation and confidence to start writing, but the problem was that while stimulating Lun Ye, he did not There is no intention to attack the black cat at the same time.

After all, in Kazuya's view, the black cat should no longer be the kind of girl who is easily frustrated, because whether it is herself, Kirino, or even Ayase, they have all criticized her novels mercilessly, so this Once, although he expected that the script of the black cat would be severely criticized by Lun Ye, he still felt that the black cat should no problem.

Therefore, when the black cat cried out abruptly, Kazuya was obviously stunned.

Of course, Kazuya was not the only one who was stunned, the real one who made the black cat sad

"The culprit" - An Yi Lun also, showed a bitter face, obviously felt a sense of inconceivable and unknown.

For him, he has absolutely no intention of accusing the girl in front of him. He is just talking about things and feels that he is very dissatisfied with the script of the black cat. In this case, he comments on other games or novels when he updates his blog online. is not uncommon.

But what he didn't expect at all was that pointing out other people's problems in person would look completely different from when he was in a virtual space.

So, seeing what he said made this girl who was just acquainted even though she seemed to be full of chuunia, but was still gentle, made him cry, and Lun also became confused and didn't know what to do at all.

Of course, fortunately, in addition to the two men in the room who were surprised by the black cat's state, there was also a woman who was better at regulating the atmosphere and emotions. The moment the black cat cried, Kato stood there. He got up, like a hen protecting his calf, and pulled the crying black cat behind him who was sitting between the two boys, under the piercing gazes of the two boys, and said with some dissatisfaction:

"Hey, the two of you, how can you talk so hard to classmate Wugeng?

She is younger than you after all! "

"Well, it's not me who said the accusation - well, forget it, I was wrong!"

Kazuya was habitually trying to refute, but he wisely shut his mouth when he saw Kato's frowning brows and the somewhat penetrating eyes he cast.

And Lun Ye on the other side, although he didn't understand the specific situation, he was obviously much smarter than He Ye. He raised his hands high and made an appearance of apology. At least he had an attitude, which was much better than not admitting his fault. , isn't it?

"Okay, let Junior Sister Wugeng calm down, Aragaki-san, you should have thought of this when you asked her to help!

Why don't you think about the girl's mood? "

Glancing at the script in front of the black cat's computer screen, Kato also roughly understood the problem, and said with a slightly dissatisfied glance at Kazuya.

"I really didn't expect her to be like this!"

Kazuo lowered his head in frustration.

"You guy, sometimes you overestimate others' reactions, and sometimes you underestimate others' reactions."

Looking at Kazuya who looked apologetic, Kato shook his head helplessly and stopped talking.

"But ah, even if you say this, you will definitely be very upset,"

It was at this moment that Lun raised his hand cautiously and said,

"But this girl's script will definitely not pass the test. It will take a lot of time to revise it. The workload is no less than rewriting it, right?"

"I know it's impossible, but she can at least write a lot of lines, which will reduce the workload a little bit!"

Kazuya shook his head and said,

"I called her here at the beginning to let her experience the gap between her current level and the actual real problem, so I don't expect her to be able to successfully write the script."

"So, Aragaki-san, you still take it for granted!"

Kato looked at Kazuya and shook his head gently.

"Um?

What's wrong? "

Kazuya didn't understand Kato's words, and turned to look at Kato, but at this time, he found another face with long black straight hair appeared in front of him.

I don't know when it started, the black cat has wiped away the tears on his face, and stood in front of him with a firm expression on his face:

"Who says I can't do it?"

Looking at the determined appearance of the black cat, Kazuya scratched his head and said:

"Although your confidence and determination is very good, but you have also seen that your first draft was approved by Lun Ye just now. This is not a simple level that needs to be revised, but It needs to be completely rewritten!

As I said before, this time I asked you to write the script to give you a look at the gap. "

After a pause, He also continued:

"Look, if it's me or Kirino's comment, maybe it's a comment from someone you know, it will take care of your mood to some extent, but this guy Lunya won't give it to anyone for his own game. To save face, so his evaluation just now should be said to be the best evaluation of your current writing ability. Of course, writing a game script is different from writing a novel, and the scenes that make you write this emotion are also different from the battle scenes you are used to writing. , but after all, it’s all about this kind of creation, there are still some things to figure out, you have many problems at the beginning, so these problems need to be revised slowly.”

"But this kind of slow revision just takes time and a lot of practice, right?"

The black cat retorted unceremoniously.

"That's right—"

"Then the script writing this time is almost like an exercise for a proposition composition for me,"

The black cat said firmly,

"Now you and that senior with glasses—"

"—Well, I remember that I have introduced myself. My name is An Yilun."

"Well, now neither you nor Senior An Yi seem to have time to take charge of this part of the content, then the content of this part is equivalent to stagnation, so I'll just rewrite the script for this part, right?

Write until you're satisfied, and if you're not, wait until you've finished what you're doing, and you can write it yourself, if you're satisfied, doesn't that save you time? "

"but,"

And also showed a surprised expression,

"But you have to know that although it's okay for you to do this, you have to be mentally prepared for your script to be rejected again and again?

Just now Lun also gave you such a low evaluation, you are so frustrated. If your revised work is rejected by us next time, wouldn't you be even more sad? "

"Just now, it was because I felt that I paid so much and was judged as worthless by Senior Anyi, so I was very sad, but now I understand that I can't write something of value immediately, if I don't have that aspect talent, it has to rely on continuous practice.

It is impossible to rewrite the same novel in the writing of a novel, but the writing of the script is shorter, so it can be done. Therefore, this is just a rare opportunity for me to practice the same theme repeatedly and improve myself. ! "

Obviously, although he was a little dissatisfied with Kazuya's behavior of pulling her to make up the number at the beginning, the black cat has also realized Kazuya's approach this time, and sent her a bit of a crooked attack that might better improve himself. Opportunity.

"Aragaki-san, you can actually let her try it!"

Kato interjected.

"Actually, I don't think it's a problem, right?"

Kazuya looked at Lun Ye with some headache and said,

"Lun Ye, what do you think, the girl who was criticized by you in a mess is ready to challenge again!"

Before Lun could answer, the black cat said anxiously, apparently realizing that it was Lun Ye who decided the work of the club so far:

"As I said just now, I'm not wasting manuscript paper, so even if it fails, it won't waste your time!

Just let me try it! "

"Well, although your current level may still need a lot of room for improvement to reach my satisfaction!"

Lun also stared at the black cat's dark pupils for a long time, and finally spread his hands and said,

"But well, I'll trust you for once!

Anyway, I really have nothing to lose. "

"So, should I still be in charge of reviewing the manuscript?

After all, if Shi Yu-senpai doesn't come back in the end, all the scripts will need to be unified by me in the end. "

"no problem!

Hmph, then let you see my true strength, I hid my strength just now! "

The black cat has completely lost the depressed mood just now, and replaced it with high fighting spirit!

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first draft:

"What are you writing?

You don't have the ability to independently create things in this area by yourself. Although Lun also complained just now that you let you write your own things, it's not for you to copy the plots of other galgames, but you won't make me The stuff on the plot outline becomes your own, right?

Do you know that you need to consider the degree of correlation between this branch and other branches, otherwise what is the use of giving you an outline, you can just make up a story yourself? "

Second draft:

"Although the choice of words and sentences is still too blunt, this is not the important issue of sin. The most important issue is that, as I said about your novel last time, you still force some violations into your own plot. But you have to realize that if we can read out the sense of discord, other people will be able to see it too, so you have to think carefully about how these bridges fit together, in order to appear more natural and better Effect."

Third draft:

"The previous problem is still there, but it's much better, write slower, don't be in such a hurry!"

Although it is said that every script writing of the black cat is rejected by Kazuya mercilessly, but the black cat still uses her amazing speed and super patience to challenge again and again, and Kazuya has to be surprised to find out , Although it still can't meet the standard as a whole, the script of the black cat has become more and more attractive. In Kazuya's view, the content of the last part, if it is a casual homemade galgame of a student club , can be used completely.

However, Kazuya also understands that the game that Lunya's blessing-software is going to do is not just a playful game of a student club. The so-called

"The strongest beautiful girl game" is not just an empty slogan shouted by Lun Ye, but the real idea of ​​him, so the black cat's thing that can barely be called a script is still completely unqualified.

But the performance of the black cat is good enough, and her speed is as efficient as ever. Although the side script she wrote is a relatively brief rough draft, but in one night from 5 pm to 11 pm, six It is also an amazing achievement that she can write three drafts in an hour.

You know, even Lun Ye, who has regained his energy, only wrote a straight line of basic manuscripts this night. The writing of the black cat has surpassed Kazuya's peak period purely in terms of speed. The speed when the writing mode is usually turned on is only this, so Lun also has to admire it.