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"No, this novel."

She asserted so.

"Although the structure is rigorous, there are too many proper nouns without explanation. The paragraphs are too long and not separated, which greatly affects the readability. Moreover, the plots in the middle are too routine. Is it borrowed from the recently popular animation? If it is on the web Submission is barely okay, but as a library, I suggest you revise it carefully."

After picking out the faults of the book in one breath, the girl drank half a glass of water, and then said: "And what's the story behind it? How come there is a supporting actress who becomes the leading actor?" Did it come in forcibly, right?"

Well, she should be talking about the character based on Tong Nai, and Chuhe knew it as soon as he heard it.

Chapter 262 Let Me See

As expected, the black cat was sprayed by Senshou Cunzheng.

And it was sprayed for a full 10 minutes, whether it was basic grammar and paragraph problems, character setting and plot development, and other big and small problems, all were pointed out by Qianshou Village.

"Especially this blond girl who was forcibly inserted, are you sure you are writing a light novel and not a functional novel? It would be fine if there were related foreshadowing before, but this directly added character was caught by the male lead as a pawn." O Nu or something, it's really too abrupt, and it doesn't have any effect on the development of the plot at all."

After talking for so long, the girl felt that her throat was getting dry. This was the first time she had talked so much continuously, and she was really tired.

So the remaining half glass of water was also drunk.

"Really... I thought I could read an interesting story, but it turned out to be something like this? I should also consider that I'm just a primary school student, and I can still describe it so powerfully."

Qianshoucun was complaining in a low voice, helplessly holding a small fork to insert the strawberry cake on the table, which Chuhe ordered for her just now.

"Probably because I read too many books, I told you not to refer to so much, and now you are being sprayed badly, right?" Chu He leaned his head and made fun of it.

"I want you to take care of..."

The mosquito-sized voice of the black cat reached Chu He's ears from the side, and her little head was about to drop under the table in shame.

In fact, Chu He had already read the light novel written by Black Cat yesterday afternoon, and he also put forward some personal opinions, but after all, he is only a reader and has never published a novel, so Black Cat didn't listen to his opinion. How many.

But Qianshou Village is different. Even though he is only in sixth grade now, the sales volume of his published light novels is already comparable to that of more than a dozen Kasumigaoka Shiwa. It can be said that he is one of the very powerful light novelists, and he is still Liuli's super enhanced version, her words naturally carry a lot of weight with Black Cat.

"Book? Uncle, you...Miss Black Cat is not yet an adult, is she?" After hearing Chu He's words, Qianshou Village covered his mouth in surprise.

"Why are you so surprised by an elementary school student with super rich personality knowledge?"

Chuhe knows that although Mei Yuanhua looks like a very cold and innocent primary school student, due to the dual reasons of career and family background, her knowledge about sex is far beyond ordinary people, even better than her father, a great writer. It should be richer.

But also because she knows too much, once someone brings up related topics, she will feel extremely ashamed, and she will turn into a shy posture that will collapse the whole persona.

But that state is also very cute. Chuhe liked her shy look so much when she was chasing after Fan Fan.

"What... you, you, what did you say to the elementary school students?!"

The girl's face immediately became like a red apple, and she began to speak incoherently.

Probably because of the embarrassment of being poked by Chu He's words, Senju Muramasa's face immediately became like that of Ebina's steamy girl. If it was put in an anime, it would probably be in a state of smoking above his head.

"Oh, that's a nice expression, can I take a picture first?"

Chuhe directly took out his mobile phone.

Then he was grabbed by Miss Black Cat beside him.

"Brother Chu, do you know that you will be caught eating pork chop rice like this?" The black cat looked at the couples whispering at the next table, and reminded him by pulling his sleeve helplessly.

After that, it took the black cat a while to calm down Senju Muramasa.

"Ahem, since it is your opinion, of course I will accept it well. In short, thank you very much for your guidance this time. Can I ask you for my revised manuscript later?"

The black cat first expressed his thanks, and then took advantage of the opportunity to ask his own question.

It has been more than three years since she wrote light novels, and she also submitted them to the library, but all of them were brushed down without exception. A large number of people came down and stayed at home.

Although she is not short of money now, it has always been her dream to write a light novel of her own. Although there is a light novelist in the chat group, Kasumigaoka Shiwa, who sells well, but she is writing youth novels. For daily love, I wanted to write about the different worlds of sword and magic, and I couldn't match it at all, so I didn't ask the other party for advice.

In fact, it was because if you humbly ask that fat woman for advice, you will definitely be ridiculed every day by the other party, so you simply don't ask her.

"Do you want me to read this kind of story again? Wait a minute, maybe you guys had this idea from the beginning? We are not friends, why should I waste my time helping you?"

Although Qianshou Village likes to read novels very much, it does not mean that she likes to read the same story all the time. After all, readers are like this. The same story may be impressive and read several times, but after all, it will be boring. One day, at this time, I will look for more interesting stories to read, but if I can’t find a book that attracts me to read for a period of time after reading all of them, it will become a "book shortage" of a state.

So some readers will go to various websites to find novels that appeal to them, while another small part of readers will write books by themselves to satisfy their desires.

Senshou Village belongs to the latter.

She mainly wrote her debut work because Masamune Izumi's novels changed in style and she couldn't satisfy herself. She usually reads many stories written by other authors from the perspective of readers, but she can't read the same stories again. The second time.

"I want to explain in advance that I helped Miss Black Cat to read the article today because I was entertained by you. I am going to take the entrance examination here soon, and I have not finished my book, so there is no extra After all, isn’t light novel just your own story? If it’s not difficult to describe your own story, then read more and write more. Asking questions is nothing more than talking about your own shortcomings with others , If you don’t practice well, you won’t be able to grow.”

When it comes to light novels, Senshou Village has his own views.

"Wait a minute, don't rush to refuse, can you stretch out your hand for me to have a look?" Chuhe felt that he should intervene, otherwise wouldn't today be in vain?

"Are you going to molest me?" The girl immediately became vigilant.

"Thinking too much, hurry up, let me see."

Ignoring the girl's small movements, Chuhe pulled her hand over.

Chapter 263 Preparation

Not long after, the dark clouds cleared outside the window, revealing the sun hiding behind.

It is already 6 o'clock in the afternoon, and under the escort of Chu He and Hei Mao, Qianshou Village is stepping into the gate of his mansion, clutching his fingers.