Zongman: Exchange lives with the heroines

Xia Mo didn't expect to meet Gogen Ruri, and Gogen Ruri didn't expect to meet Xia Mo.

Moreover, they were both going the same way, to Tokyo.

The purposes vary.

Xia Mo said he was going to Tokyo to visit a friend.

Gokou Ruri...

She seemed a little embarrassed and hesitated for a few seconds before she whispered the truth.

"I wrote something and wanted to submit it in Tokyo."

Contribute?

Is it such a coincidence?

Xia Mo looked at the girl with a strange expression, then asked, "Light novel?"

"……Um."

Wu Geng Liuli lowered her head and her voice was as low as a mosquito.

Although light novels are called toilet paper in Japan, they are still difficult to produce and not everyone is qualified to produce them.

As a junior high school student, she is too young, which makes people feel that she is too arrogant.

In response, Xia Mo said that he was overthinking and gave a thumbs up, praising: "Great, I couldn't do that when I was your age."

Wu Geng Liuli looked up in surprise when she heard that. Seeing his sincere tone, her face slightly blushed and she said, "It's not that great. I don't know if I can pass it."

“Whether you can pass or not, the fact that you’ve made it this far has already surpassed many people.”

Xia Mo started to praise Wu Geng Liuli, making her blush and feel embarrassed.

"Stop talking, stop talking, Sister Yukinoshita..."

Feeling the strange looks from the passengers around her, Gogen Ruri covered her blushing face and reached out to tug at Xia Mo's sleeve.

Stop talking. If you continue, I will be too embarrassed to face anyone.

"Okay, I won't say anything more. Can I call you Liuli-chan?"

Xia Mo turned off his boasting mode and made a request.

Calling someone by name directly means establishing a close friendship.

"Then can I call you Sister Yukino?"

Gokuru Ruri did not refuse and made an equal request.

"of course can."

Xia Mo nodded without hesitation.

For a time, the relationship between the two became much closer.

"Come on, add a line."

"Ah."

"Black cat?"

Looking at the nickname of the other party's account, Xia Mo pretended to be surprised and asked: "Is this your nickname?"

Gogen Ruri nodded shyly.

"so cute."

Xia Mo smiled.

Wu Geng Liuli didn't dare to answer, for fear that he would continue to praise her.

Xia Mo smiled and started talking about other things.

Naturally, the two talked about light novels.

Gokou Ruri was surprised and asked, "Sister Yukino also reads light novels?"

In her opinion, a high school girl who is as dazzling as "Yukinoshita Yukino" and looks like a lady from a noble family should read all kinds of famous books on a daily basis.

"Of course I read it. Light novels are very interesting."

Xia Mo nodded and said, "I have a friend who is about to debut as a contracted author. He is the one I am going to Tokyo with. I want to accompany him to Fuzugawa to sign the contract..."

"Really?"

It was such a coincidence that Gokou Ruri found it a little hard to believe.

"It can't be fake."

Xia Mo took out his cell phone and showed it to her, which contained the manuscript of the novel.

After confirming that it was not any novel on the market, Gogen Ruri believed it, her eyes full of envy.

When will her novel also be signed?

"Can I read your novel?"

Xia Mo expressed curiosity.

Gogen Ruri hesitated for a moment and took out a stack of novel manuscripts from her bag.

"Please give me your advice."

Xia Mo took the manuscript, opened it and read it, then he fell silent.

A few minutes later.

Facing Wu Geng Liuli's expectant gaze, he put down the manuscript, pondered for a moment and said: "Liuli-chan, your novel is very rigorous and logical."

"Thank you."

Gogen Ruri thanked him quietly, her little face unable to stop showing joy.

"but……"

Xia Mo changed the subject and said seriously: "The following comments may be a bit unpleasant to hear. Are you sure you want to listen?"

Wu Geng Liuli had a bad feeling in her heart, but things have come to this point...

"Listen!"

She nodded vigorously.

"Your novel is boring and unreadable."

Xia Mo’s evaluation is so heartbreaking. Can a novel that cannot be read still be called a novel?

"…You don't understand."

There is no way a lady from a noble family could understand light novels.

Gogen Ruri snatched the manuscript from Xia Mo's hand expressionlessly, then turned around, looking as if she didn't want to pay any attention to Xia Mo.

"Angry?"

Xia Mo leaned closer and asked, but Wu Geng Liuli said nothing.

Obviously, she was quite angry about the previous comments.

"Want to hear my reasons?"

This... is really impossible to refuse.

Gogen Ruri turned around, glanced at Xia Mo, and nodded slowly.

"You said."

She wanted to see what basis the other party had to say that her novel was boring.

"First of all, let me ask you a question. What do you think is the most important thing in a novel?"

Wu Geng Liuli thought for a while, and said uncertainly: "Setting?"

Xia Mo smiled and said, "I'll give you a chance to reorganize your words."

very scary.

Gogen Ruri shrank her neck in fear and muttered softly, "Then what do you say it is?"

I'm asking you, not you asking me.

Xia Mo sighed helplessly and said, "The most important thing about a novel is the story. Writing a novel is about telling a story. As a novelist, everything you do is to tell the story you have in mind."

Gogen Ruri thought about what he said and gradually frowned.

Listening to the Lord's words is like listening to the words.

It cannot be said that it does not make sense, but that it makes too much sense.

It's all general principles, without any substance, which is equivalent to nonsense.

So Xia Mo started to talk about the practical stuff next.

"I've said before that your novels are boring and uninteresting to read. These are my personal opinions and are not important."

"After all, everyone has their own taste. Maybe someone likes your style."

"But your novel has a fatal flaw. If you don't correct it, to be honest, I don't see any hope of making your debut."

Wu Geng Liuli couldn't help but ask: "What are the shortcomings?"

She writes novels for her personal interest, and also to make money from publishing to ease the financial pressure on her family.

“No distinction between primary and secondary.”

Xia Mo further explained: "Writing a novel is about telling a story, but I can't see the story in your novel. It's all story settings, which reverses the priorities."

“How can you tell a story without making the setting clear?”

Gogen Ruri was not convinced. She had spent a long time thinking about these things before writing them.

"The setting is not important, telling the story clearly is important."

Seeing the confused expression on the girl's face, Xia Mo continued, "The story is the core. If the story is told clearly, people will read it no matter how bad the setting is. If the story is not told clearly, no matter how good the setting is, what's the point if others can't understand it?"

“…Is it very profound?”

How can you not understand?

Wu Geng Liuli looked at the manuscript in her hand, then looked at Xia Mo in confusion.

"It's not profound, but it does look like a headache."

However, lightness is meant to make people relax, which is completely contrary to the purpose.

Gogen Ruri was silent for a long time.

Seeing this, Xia Mo felt a little guilty.

It seems that what was said was too much, it's all Yukinoshita's fault.

Just as he was about to speak to comfort her, Gokou Ruri took a deep breath and said seriously: "Sister Yukino, please continue."

Although it sounds a bit hurtful, what they say is the truth and has real substance.

Xia Mo hesitated for a moment and said, "Being good at writing settings is actually your advantage, but you have to be careful about the method. You can't just throw it out without thinking, you have to integrate it into the plot..."

He spoke very clearly and Gogen Ruri listened attentively, thinking about it secretly and felt that he gained a lot.

A few minutes later.

Xia Mo stopped.

Wu Geng Liuli said with a hint of regret: "Sister Yukino, please continue."

Xia Mo said unhappily: "Whatever you say, I've been squeezed dry by you."

Gogen Ruri looked disappointed, it was too little.

Seeing this, Xia Mo couldn't help but knock her on the head and preached: "It's enough to know the general theory. The important thing is to write..."

There is obviously more.

Gogen Ruri muttered to herself, covering her head and listening carefully again.

A few minutes later.

The tram has arrived.

Gogen Ruri followed Xia Mo off the tram, sighing with reluctance in her heart.

How come time flies so fast? She still has many things she hasn't had time to ask.

Arrived outside the station.

Xia Mo asked, "Which library do you want to submit to?"

"I……"

Gogen Ruri was hesitant.

Xia Mo was shocked and said, "You haven't thought about it yet?!"

"No, I've already thought about it, but..."

After Xia Mo's advice on the train, Wu Geng Liuli found that her original novel was full of loopholes and it was almost impossible to sign a contract.

So now she's backing out.

"Ruri-chan, thank you for your trust in me, but I think the opinions of professional editors are more worthy of hearing. What do you think?"

You want to pass the blame to me? No way!

Xia Mo took Wu Geng Liuli and called a taxi.

"If you want to debut, follow me. I'll take you to meet the contracted writers."

After hearing this, Wu Geng, who was still hesitating, immediately made up his mind.

"Thank you, Sister Yukino."

……

"Ding dong!"

The doorbell rang, and soon the door slowly opened.

Looking at that extremely familiar face, Xia Mo was stunned for a moment, then he smiled brightly.

"Hello, nice to meet you. I'm Yukinoshita Yukino. Natsume-kun, please give me your guidance."

Yukinoshita Yukino looked at Xia Mo, then looked at the timid girl behind Xia Mo, was silent for a few seconds, and took out her cell phone.

"Hello, the police?"